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Pearl's avatar

Can you please not, I'm sobbing. Like, I was already overstimulated and I read your piece, this poem, and this time, I couldn't stop my tears. I ain't lying, I'm honestly into this strong urge of gripping you hard and crushing you with a hug. You never fail to amaze me dude, it's like your posts have created a home in my heart. Everytime I read 'em, I am transported back in time, back in life, and that's the magic that you have.

'How dare you paint the world red, but mostly, how dare you speak the truth?' It's the power your pen holds.

I'm always going to be sat for your side of poetry, it always has this perspective that makes the point of view even more astonishing. Love love love this. And I love you. And I love that girl who wrote this and cried that night, because damn it if it ain't the best of them all.

Sana's avatar

I -

I am .. sorry pearl, i has to let it out in one way or another, and i did it finally.

You have no speck of clue how much your words mean to me, how much it is helping me while i a feel robbed of everything that life once gave away for free. It's like i am being stripped off strategically of those things that I hold dear. And on one of them is writing...

I will not question anything as i am too small and unworthy for doing so, but i am sure, all of this will make sense soon, and when it does. I will find you and hug you harder for staying by my side.

Pearl's avatar

just, let the trail of words flow, its the only therapy we can afford. the people of this world are bipolar, ridiculous and two sided coins, they wont let you breathe that air, by saying you are being granted that for free but in truth thats our right. dont overthink okay, because you are never too small to question. thats how we change them , or ourselves.

always here for you ;)

Theo's avatar

Naale bulbul ke sunon aur hama tan gosh rahon

Ham nawa mein bhi koi gul hun jo khamosh rahon

(Me adding Iqbal everywhere for no reason)

Sally's avatar

Sadly, some women managed to do it alone, but others faced this or worse, a life like dead. I don't know if you read " S thousand splendid suns" your piece gave me the same feeling.

Sana's avatar

They have.. its a tribute to all of them, they were brave to bare, but such bravery should not be needed in the first place.

I haven't read that book, i just couldn't... ❤️‍🩹

Fatima Z.'s avatar

AAG LAGA DO SOCIETY KO 😈🔪

What a splendid narrative piece… ♥️♥️♥️

Sana's avatar

🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥🔥

The Writer Zohaib's avatar

Wow!

Gripping, tense, real, bold

Well done sana. Indeed poems like such must be spread and read by all the teenage girls in schools, colleges and even universities. Living on the narrow line between dutiful wife, daughter, mother and cursed, poised witch women, the margin with women in the modern society is narrow than ever.

I loved the piece by the portrayal of the death as the main plot to criticize the demanding, imposed standards of the society.

Keep bleeding Inkkk!!

Sana's avatar

Thankyou so much 😊

Paro's avatar

Aaj bhi mere khayaalon ki tapish zinda hai

Mere guftaar ki derina ravish zinda hai

Sana's avatar

I love it so much, every word from that song is so deep

Rimsha's avatar

Achingly beautiful. 🩵

Aliza's avatar

Omgg sana, so so speechless rn 😭✨ every single line tore my heart, its so gut wrenching 😭 SOMETIMES I REALLY WISH KI HAMARE LIYE ALAG SE PLANET HOTA 😭

Sana's avatar

😭😭

Ameliorating A's avatar

Sana!!

I honestly don't have end words to describe how this piece made me feel..my heart feels like sinking, the eyes are moist and mind is both hurting and raging.

This is the reality in so many places yar.

You've really described it so well. It must be out there in the bigger population.

Really such an important, real and powerful piece Sana.

Hard off miss!!

Lots of love 🫂❤️❤️

Thank you for writing this. It's gonna stay with me for so long.